OK
Delete ?
Warning: Adult Content
The content you were about to view is not suitable for minors.
The page that you are trying to access contains adult content, which may not be suited for minors. Please verify that you are aware of this, and are within legal age limit to access this content. Note that we take no responsibility for any content if you decide to proceed to this page as a minor.
Leave this page
I am an adult, continue
Chapter 6
Published 1 month ago
Drag & Drop

*.jpg or *.png
or browser file
Images posted in this section must comply with the Mecabricks rules. Please read carefully the rules before publishing.

by

No renderings uploaded yet
257
11
About
Inventory
Share
Okay everyone, welcome to chapter 6! Don’t know how well written it is, but I hope y'all enjoy.




I couldn't contain my surprise. Why would StarFire—I mean Raymond do this? Alex continued, “now I know that you're going to try to give Ray the benefit of the doubt, but it doesn't look good. He's been pretending to be our pals just to take advantage of us.” I sighed, “well, how are we going to get out of this place?”

Alex glanced around mischievously, “that's where Leah Mullens comes in!” My expression went blank, “who’s that?” “The user, BlackPixel!” “Oh,” I replied, “so what's the plan?” Alex scooted closer to me on the couch, and began.

“So, as we both know, BlackPix—I mean Leah is an expert hacker. But currently, instead of using her talents for selfish gain, she’s using them for good. Like helping the police, and now, things like this. Dustin, she's going to hack into this world’s main computer system!” I beamed, “awesome—I mean, how?”

He rolled his eyes and continued. “well, she's going to use the computer in my hotel room to do it. But there's a slight problem. both computers must be hooked up to a modem. Mine is, but Raymond’s isn’t.” I was puzzled, “so what are we going to do?” Alex giggled, “we're going to sneak into the computer room, and hook up a modem!”

I glanced around, “and where is this room?” He replied, “actually, it's not a computer room, but a computer building, and it's pretty close to this very hotel!” I was impressed, “how do you know all this stuff?” He laughed, “I've done quite I bit of digging around.” I stood, “so when is this plan going to take place?”

He got up as well, “tonight. Follow me, we're going to my hotel room, that’s where Leah is.” I followed him out of the doorway and into the hallway towards room 113. When we finally reached it, Alex knocked and whispered loudly, “It's us.” BlackPixel opened the door and was also in her sig-fig form. She wore black pants and a black hoodie.

“Come on in guys, hey Snap!” Alex interrupted, “his name is Dustin.” She smiled warmly, “it's great to finally meet you, Dustin! Now, let's get to business, we need to hurry if we are ever going to pull this off.” We all made our way over to Alex’s computer. He pulled up a map of the computer building, and let us both get familiar with the place.

We talked a little while longer, and then headed out of the room, towards the computer building. All 3 of us were sneaking down various alleyways to avoid being seen by anyone. We were supposed to be in our hotel rooms after all. “Do you have the modem,” Leah asked Alex. “Yup, right here,” he replied, “don't want to forget that!”

After about 10 minutes of sneaking, I spotted something in the distance, “look, there it is, the computer building!”




So, that’s chapter 6! Feel free to let me know what you think (please be honest). And also please correct me on any mistakes. Thanks a million for reading, and I hope that you can make it back to this page next week for chapter 7!
Download model inventory: CSV | Bricklink XML
0
Part
Image
Quantity
Name of the part
Direct Link
Embed Viewer
67 comments
Post comment
Login to comment
LegoWilderness
1 month ago
Man, this is totally awesome! Oh, LegoWilderness will? Bold of you to assume I would correct any mistakes. Well, just for that, I'm going to keep my mouth shut, no matter how hard it may become!

*takes a roll of duct tape and rips off a noticeable stickier piece*

There, I'm silent!

*wraps it around head*
SnapStudio
1 month ago
Thank you!


*Checks personal message section*

Guess the "Duck Tape" fell off.
SnapStudio
1 month ago
As I said, I appreciate stuff like that, very helpful!
Guitarman2
1 month ago
I don't know if all the paragraph breaks is my favorite writing style though
SnapStudio
1 month ago
What, the spaces?

Yeah, I just did that so you could read it without losing your place or being overwhelmed.

Still learning, I’ve never done this before . . .
KnightofElabor
1 month ago
Nice! It's very witty and fast pace but there are also lots of details. Overall, it's well balanced and i can't wait for Ch.2!!!
(also, i personally liked the separated paragraphs cuz it made it easier for me to read. But that's just my opinion)
Operator011
1 month ago
Hey, Snapper! It reads well, is interesting, and is well paced. One of the best chapters I've read so far! You definitely need to work on you "Proper-sarcastic-cynic" phrasing a little though. I guess I'm just picky because that's kinda my thing. xD
I think the paragraph breaks are a little too frequent, but it doesn't detract from the actual story (IMO). Overall, great job! I'll go proof read it for any errors real quick...
Operator011
1 month ago
Okay, grammar/punctuation roasting time:

In the sentence "I quickly set my bike in the garage and walked inside the kitchen, my mom was making some of her 'famous' homemade pizzas (those are the bomb, as some person who says that kind of stuff would say)." the comma in the middle is out of place. It should either be a period, or a semi-colon.

“just wondering how your part of our build is going” There should be a period there. Also, when you say "I reply." it looks like you wrote the previous sentence. It should be "I reply," with a comma.

". . . and by the way, there's a conversation going on in the forum, if you'd like to join, BlackPixel and StarFire are there.” You need to either get rid of the first comma, or turn the second comma into a period.

Note: Whenever you are adressing someone, as in "Hello, Snap!" you should put a comma in between the greeting (or whatever it is) and the name. E.g. "You can come onto the forum if you'd like, Operator."

You said "She was joking of course 'I agree with him though, both . . .'"
You should have a period in between the words and quote, if you word it this way.

Okay, I think that's all! Oh, one more thing. I don't think that you need to put quotes around every user's name, unless you're mentioning them for the first time. Great job!
LegoWilderness
1 month ago
Op, I said exactly that in the PM


Also, be sure to tell me if there are any mistakes, or grammar errors in my writing, since I don't want to look like the condescending rude guy who needs to work on his own stuff first


Operator, you should look into writing grammar books... you've done your homework!
SnapStudio
1 month ago
@Everyone:
Just so ya know, I wrote all this out as a draft in the program "pages". Because it’s a draft it’s definitely going to have spelling/grammar issues and I hope to correct those in the future. It’s also why there is all that spacing. If they weren’t there, it would be a very difficult and overwhelming thing to read. Now, this doesn’t mean that I want you guys to stop giving me advice (I love that), I'm just clarifying those two things!


@KnightofElabor:
Thanks so much, buddy!

@Operator011:
Thanks for the advice, much appreciated! (See message to @everyone above.)

@MrBrick:
Thanks, man! *Fist Bump*

@LegoWilderness:
IKR!
Operator011
1 month ago
LW:
No, you're stuff has the occasional misspelling, but other than that it's fine. No, I've just read a lot of books. xD

Snap: Okay, cool. I wasn't trying to roast you, just offering some constructive criticism. :thumbs_up:
Operator011
1 month ago
Wait, no. Wait. It's THIS: ": +1 :"?!?!?! Oh my precious. Anyways,
Dragon_Rider06
1 month ago
Wow great writing! Y'know I read somewhere that everyone is a writer if only they'll take the time to try. Looks like that's true!

"(please don’t waste your time wondering why)" Ok I am definitely wasting time wondering why. Y' can't just say something like that and not expect my curiosity not to start giving me grief.
Dragon_Rider06
1 month ago
Also I think the frequent paragraph breaks make it easier to read personally, I don't really like one huge lump of text.
LegoWilderness
1 month ago
Like Bob Ross said, "Talent is a pursued interest. Anything that you're willing to practice, you can do."

Keep it up, this is already something pretty fantastic, and it'll get even better!
SnapStudio
1 month ago
@LegoWilderness
Thanks again, man.

@Dragon_Rider06
Glad that you like it (so far).
Greenflame24
1 month ago
Time to correct some grammar! Jk
If I tried to correct anything O011 would be all over me telling me how my corrections need to be corrected
No, but literally. Great chapter, looking forward to reading more!

#MecabricksHasBecomeAnOfficalWritersWebSite
SnapStudio
1 month ago
Just a little bit longer.

Chapter 2 is almost here!
Operator011
1 month ago
Oh, I see! They're the same post. Good idea!
LegoWilderness
1 month ago
Man, I literally thought I had went bonkers when I saw one of my older comments on this "new" model

Three fries short of a Happy Meal, you could say.

Much, much better! I love this next chapter - it almost feels like an Adventures in Odyssey episode
LegoWilderness
1 month ago
For my corrections, and critiques

Here we go - you might want to look into some punctuation and quotation booklets, because when your characters speak, it is a little hard to know when the sentence stops and starts. That's all I have to say, since this was quite fabulous!
KnightofElabor
1 month ago
Nice!!!
(I have a feeling this post is gonna have LOTS of comments
)
CarTuner
1 month ago
Noob Question!: How do I get one model into another?
SnapStudio
1 month ago
@Operator-May-I-Help-You-011
Thanks a million!

@MrBrick
Thanks, dude!

@LegoWilderness
AIO? Never thought of it that way.
Thanks for the advice, and encouragement! To be honest though, I’ve never actually written and typed out a book before, definitely still learning here!

@KnightofElabor
Why thank you, sir!
Greenflame24
4 weeks ago
Great chapter Snap! The only things I noticed were, "Well, I'm still alive, and your device seems to be working perfectly." I think you might have meant, "Well, you're still alive..."

Also... I don't think that the top of a laptop is call the "lid". I know, it's kinda one of those puzzling things... anyways, it is actually called the display... I think


Anyways, great story... look'n forward to reading more!
SnapStudio
4 weeks ago
Thank you!

I actually did mean for him to say that, but now that I think about it more, it does sound kind of weird.

O_o
Greenflame24
4 weeks ago
No! SNAP! YOU ARE DEAD! YOUR HEAD IS COMPLETELY SEVERED FROM YOUR NECK!

Image
Greenflame24
4 weeks ago
Anyways... as always... great chapter!
SnapStudio
4 weeks ago


Thanks, buddy!

Glad to see you’re paying attention!
MrBrick
4 weeks ago
@Greenei I noticed that as well...

A moment of silence as we remember SnapStudio’s neck. Rest in Peace

Operator011
4 weeks ago
Great chapter! I just caught one thing: you spelled "recent" as "resent." Other than that, this was awesome!
LegoWilderness
3 weeks ago
You would be a very overweight human, changing into a Lego minifig like that on us! The equivalent of a Lego figure's bodyweight to a human's is 300 lbs.


Well, you did a phenomenal job!

Keep it up!!
SnapStudio
3 weeks ago
Thanks, guys!

In case y'all are wondering, my name isn’t Dusten Smith.


Just using my username for this story.
LegoWilderness
3 weeks ago
So, fantastic chapter, it's getting even better as you go on! Much better writing than last time (not that it wasn't awesome for the third chapter)!

Did the gunmen look mad because they had "angry clone" faces? Is this StarFire an alternate dimension version of Hammy?? Also, is this my apartment?!?
I have a thousand questions myself.
Operator011
3 weeks ago
Great chapter, Snap! A little bit of action! I personally would've thought about it for a bit, considered my chances, and then I'd've gone with the "rescuers." xD Then again, that's probably why I got sorted into Ravenclaw and not Gryffindor. Reason being I would go with them is I have nowhere else to go, and I wouldn't know what I was running into or from. xD

aNyWAys, great chapter! I really enjoyed reading it. There were a couple parts where I had to re-read some of the dialogue to make sense of it, but they were few. Good job!
SnapStudio
3 weeks ago
Thanks a million, y'all!

Now that you mention it, I kind of wish I'd included some of you guys in this thing.

But you never know, some of you just might appear . . .
Operator011
2 weeks ago
Wait, what did I just say? "Reason being I would go with them is . . . " WHAT THE (to quote GRRR-eenie boi) TOENAIL?! XD
It should've been "Reason I would go with them being . . . " xD
KnightofElabor
2 weeks ago
Nice! These just keep getting better! (sorry i'm late)
SnapStudio
2 weeks ago
Thanks, dude!


And chapter 5 is now up, everyone!
Operator011
2 weeks ago
Snap: WOW, good plot twist. Interesting . . . .

Also, I think you should maybe just delete the model, and post a new chapter. The comment section is getting a bit clogged up . . . .
LegoWilderness
2 weeks ago
Oh my


I was starting to like StarFire... but I have my own theories

Very well written! Nice job bro!
MrBrick
2 weeks ago
Epic plot twist.
SnapStudio
2 weeks ago
@Everyone
Thanks for reading, and for 6K views!


@Operator
Well, ummm. This thing probably isn’t going to be one of those 18 chapter Mecabricks Novels. I'm hoping to wrap it up by Chapter 9, maybe start something new. BTW, what happened to "The LightBringers."
LegoWilderness
2 days ago
Nice job dude! Holy cow, this is getting good!
SnapStudio
2 days ago
Thanks, dude!

Did I miss a week?
Operator011
21 hours ago
Snap: (about the Lightbringers) One word: PROCRASTINATION

Great chapter! It's good to meet some more users. I'm surprised that we haven't see more random people, TBH. Any explanation?
SnapStudio
21 hours ago
Thank you, sir!

So you want the truth?

Well, I'm honestly trying to stick to the main subject of this story so that it doesn’t continue for too long. I'd like to get this thing finished so that I can focus on some other things, like creating some more new models.

Want to know a secret? Chapter 7 is not even written yet!


Also, it appears that only 3 people have read every chapter. Thanks so much for hanging with me guys!

But I definitely do want to give some of you guys a cameo before this thing ends.
KnightofElabor
16 hours ago
Dang, I think I missed a chapter. Sorry bro.
This chapter was really great tho! I like where the story is going!
(and hopefully I'll be on time for the next one
)
48 models | 6.5k views
Suggested Models
what the heck is this thing!?!?
by justyouraveragebuilder
Casa nivel 2 - Parte 4
by Profesor_Mario
Alien Recolector
by Alfred