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*Me*
"Chapter 10 is here!"

*Y'all*
"Bout time."

This is probably my new favorite chapter!
Just a heads up, this is the last one.


Me and BlackPixel split up when we reached the computer warehouse. She told me to go free everyone from their cells, while she hacked the system. I started to protest, as I had no lock picking, key finding, or guard convincing abilities. She replied, “just listen to your inner voice”. I gave her a goofy look as I remembered the Toy Story Line.

She laughed, “I’m totally kidding. Guess you'll just have to pray . . . and do some learning on the fly!” I sighed as she ran off.

When I reached the jail part of the building, I slowly opened the door and peered in.

“That you Snap?”, Operator011 asked. I replied, “yeah, it’s me.” I wondered why StarFire and TheClipper had not stopped me on the way in. I glanced through the barred window on the door, and saw them snoring their heads off.

“Classic”, I whispered to myself. “C’mon bro, you gonna get us out of here or what?”, MrBrick spoke up. I whispered back, “Coming.” I walked over to LegoWilderness’s cell and started fidgeting with the lock.

GreenFlame24 rolled his eyes.

I laughed, “Got any dynamite?”

“That would wake our foes”, Dragon_Rider06 said. Then I got an idea, “hey GreenFlame, doesn’t your sig-fig hold fire or something?” GreenFlame24 smiled and ignited the . . . well . . . green flame.

He then used it to weld the lock off of his cell. Everyone stared in amazement. He repeated the process several times to free everyone else. But then, while freeing the last user (GuitarMan2) the lock fell to the ground and awoke TheClipper and StarFire. Operator011 gasped as they burst in. But they were not alone, BlackPixel was right behind them. She called to me, “I was able to hack the system, but there’s a huge problem—“ She was cut off by the sound of a gunshot.

She screamed, pixelized, and disappeared. The shot had come from StarFire. I was shocked, where had she gone? GreenFlame24 started shooting balls of green fire at the guards, and they soon pixelized and disappeared as well. All of us stood there, stunned.

“C’mon you human jelly beans, let’s go!”, Dragon_Rider06 shouted. We all ran out the door and through the warehouse. Finally, KightofElabor stopped us in our tracks, “where are we running to exactly?”

There was silence, and a few digital crickets.

We all realized that we’d been running . . . just because it felt right to. I then spotted some trucks parked in the corner of the warehouse.

“I have an idea, follow me!”, I shouted. Everyone ran after me. We all piled into one of the trucks and I started the engine.

I glanced around and revved the engine, “looks like we're gonna have to GO THROUGH THE WALL!!!

KnightofElabor reached his arm out of the truck and flipped a switch. A garage door opened.

“Or . . . we could use that”, I shrugged.

I raced the truck out of the warehouse, across a stretch of grass, and towards a bridge. Then all of a sudden, the ground began to shake, and a thunderstorm started. It was what you might expect from a digital storm. Numbers, lights, and long bright streaks of lightning flashed through the sky.

Beeps and other noises echoed around us. And all out of the blue. Then it all seemed to come together, forming an ear-piercing sound that shook my eardrums.

And then . . . it all stopped.

I sat up. I was back in my house on the floor. I glanced at my old computer, which was smoking. “Good riddance!”, I shouted as I jumped up and threw it out the window.


The End!


Just kidding. So, it turned out that when BlackPixel was shot, she went back to her own house on the floor . . . like me. She then hacked and destroyed the program. Then tracked the thugs’ location (Southern Alabama) who were soon picked up by the authorities.

All from her own computer.

BrickWorks was soon deleted from the internet by Mr. Hayes who was terrified by what had happened. Pretty sad.

I myself kept in touch with my friends (old and new) through E-Mail. One day I received an E-Mail from LegoWilderness. This is what it said . . .

“You won't believe it. I found a website similar to BrickWorks. It’s called Mecabricks. Looks great! I’m sending this to the others, hope you will check it out.”





And the rest, as they say, is history.
I know, this isn’t how we met, what happened before MB, etc . . .
But it was cool to think up.


Thanks so much to all of you that read this and supported me!

Feel free to let me know what you think (please be honest). And also please correct me on any mistakes. I hope that you can make it back to this page next time for . . . oh wait . . . this is the last one.


I do have an idea for another story.
Would probably be a bit shorter though!
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LWProductions
4 months ago
Man, this is totally awesome! Oh, LegoWilderness will? Bold of you to assume I would correct any mistakes. Well, just for that, I'm going to keep my mouth shut, no matter how hard it may become!

*takes a roll of duct tape and rips off a noticeable stickier piece*

There, I'm silent!

*wraps it around head*
SnapStudio
4 months ago
Thank you!


*Checks personal message section*

Guess the "Duck Tape" fell off.
SnapStudio
4 months ago
As I said, I appreciate stuff like that, very helpful!
Guitarman2
4 months ago
I don't know if all the paragraph breaks is my favorite writing style though
SnapStudio
4 months ago
What, the spaces?

Yeah, I just did that so you could read it without losing your place or being overwhelmed.

Still learning, I’ve never done this before . . .
KnightofElabor
4 months ago
Nice! It's very witty and fast pace but there are also lots of details. Overall, it's well balanced and i can't wait for Ch.2!!!
(also, i personally liked the separated paragraphs cuz it made it easier for me to read. But that's just my opinion)
Operator011
4 months ago
Hey, Snapper! It reads well, is interesting, and is well paced. One of the best chapters I've read so far! You definitely need to work on you "Proper-sarcastic-cynic" phrasing a little though. I guess I'm just picky because that's kinda my thing. xD
I think the paragraph breaks are a little too frequent, but it doesn't detract from the actual story (IMO). Overall, great job! I'll go proof read it for any errors real quick...
Operator011
4 months ago
Okay, grammar/punctuation roasting time:

In the sentence "I quickly set my bike in the garage and walked inside the kitchen, my mom was making some of her 'famous' homemade pizzas (those are the bomb, as some person who says that kind of stuff would say)." the comma in the middle is out of place. It should either be a period, or a semi-colon.

“just wondering how your part of our build is going” There should be a period there. Also, when you say "I reply." it looks like you wrote the previous sentence. It should be "I reply," with a comma.

". . . and by the way, there's a conversation going on in the forum, if you'd like to join, BlackPixel and StarFire are there.” You need to either get rid of the first comma, or turn the second comma into a period.

Note: Whenever you are adressing someone, as in "Hello, Snap!" you should put a comma in between the greeting (or whatever it is) and the name. E.g. "You can come onto the forum if you'd like, Operator."

You said "She was joking of course 'I agree with him though, both . . .'"
You should have a period in between the words and quote, if you word it this way.

Okay, I think that's all! Oh, one more thing. I don't think that you need to put quotes around every user's name, unless you're mentioning them for the first time. Great job!
LWProductions
4 months ago
Op, I said exactly that in the PM


Also, be sure to tell me if there are any mistakes, or grammar errors in my writing, since I don't want to look like the condescending rude guy who needs to work on his own stuff first


Operator, you should look into writing grammar books... you've done your homework!
SnapStudio
4 months ago
@Everyone:
Just so ya know, I wrote all this out as a draft in the program "pages". Because it’s a draft it’s definitely going to have spelling/grammar issues and I hope to correct those in the future. It’s also why there is all that spacing. If they weren’t there, it would be a very difficult and overwhelming thing to read. Now, this doesn’t mean that I want you guys to stop giving me advice (I love that), I'm just clarifying those two things!


@KnightofElabor:
Thanks so much, buddy!

@Operator011:
Thanks for the advice, much appreciated! (See message to @everyone above.)

@MrBrick:
Thanks, man! *Fist Bump*

@LegoWilderness:
IKR!
Operator011
4 months ago
LW:
No, you're stuff has the occasional misspelling, but other than that it's fine. No, I've just read a lot of books. xD

Snap: Okay, cool. I wasn't trying to roast you, just offering some constructive criticism. :thumbs_up:
Operator011
4 months ago
Wait, no. Wait. It's THIS: ": +1 :"?!?!?! Oh my precious. Anyways,
Dragon_Rider06
4 months ago
Wow great writing! Y'know I read somewhere that everyone is a writer if only they'll take the time to try. Looks like that's true!

"(please don’t waste your time wondering why)" Ok I am definitely wasting time wondering why. Y' can't just say something like that and not expect my curiosity not to start giving me grief.
Dragon_Rider06
4 months ago
Also I think the frequent paragraph breaks make it easier to read personally, I don't really like one huge lump of text.
LWProductions
4 months ago
Like Bob Ross said, "Talent is a pursued interest. Anything that you're willing to practice, you can do."

Keep it up, this is already something pretty fantastic, and it'll get even better!
SnapStudio
4 months ago
@LegoWilderness
Thanks again, man.

@Dragon_Rider06
Glad that you like it (so far).
Greenflame24
4 months ago
Time to correct some grammar! Jk
If I tried to correct anything O011 would be all over me telling me how my corrections need to be corrected
No, but literally. Great chapter, looking forward to reading more!

#MecabricksHasBecomeAnOfficalWritersWebSite
SnapStudio
4 months ago
Just a little bit longer.

Chapter 2 is almost here!
Operator011
4 months ago
Oh, I see! They're the same post. Good idea!
LWProductions
4 months ago
Man, I literally thought I had went bonkers when I saw one of my older comments on this "new" model

Three fries short of a Happy Meal, you could say.

Much, much better! I love this next chapter - it almost feels like an Adventures in Odyssey episode
LWProductions
4 months ago
For my corrections, and critiques

Here we go - you might want to look into some punctuation and quotation booklets, because when your characters speak, it is a little hard to know when the sentence stops and starts. That's all I have to say, since this was quite fabulous!
KnightofElabor
4 months ago
Nice!!!
(I have a feeling this post is gonna have LOTS of comments
)
CarTuner
4 months ago
Noob Question!: How do I get one model into another?
SnapStudio
4 months ago
@Operator-May-I-Help-You-011
Thanks a million!

@MrBrick
Thanks, dude!

@LegoWilderness
AIO? Never thought of it that way.
Thanks for the advice, and encouragement! To be honest though, I’ve never actually written and typed out a book before, definitely still learning here!

@KnightofElabor
Why thank you, sir!
Greenflame24
4 months ago
Great chapter Snap! The only things I noticed were, "Well, I'm still alive, and your device seems to be working perfectly." I think you might have meant, "Well, you're still alive..."

Also... I don't think that the top of a laptop is call the "lid". I know, it's kinda one of those puzzling things... anyways, it is actually called the display... I think


Anyways, great story... look'n forward to reading more!
SnapStudio
4 months ago
Thank you!

I actually did mean for him to say that, but now that I think about it more, it does sound kind of weird.

O_o
Greenflame24
4 months ago
No! SNAP! YOU ARE DEAD! YOUR HEAD IS COMPLETELY SEVERED FROM YOUR NECK!

Image
Greenflame24
4 months ago
Anyways... as always... great chapter!
SnapStudio
4 months ago


Thanks, buddy!

Glad to see you’re paying attention!
MrBrick
4 months ago
@Greenei I noticed that as well...

A moment of silence as we remember SnapStudio’s neck. Rest in Peace

Operator011
4 months ago
Great chapter! I just caught one thing: you spelled "recent" as "resent." Other than that, this was awesome!
LWProductions
4 months ago
You would be a very overweight human, changing into a Lego minifig like that on us! The equivalent of a Lego figure's bodyweight to a human's is 300 lbs.


Well, you did a phenomenal job!

Keep it up!!
SnapStudio
4 months ago
Thanks, guys!

In case y'all are wondering, my name isn’t Dusten Smith.


Just using my username for this story.
LWProductions
3 months ago
So, fantastic chapter, it's getting even better as you go on! Much better writing than last time (not that it wasn't awesome for the third chapter)!

Did the gunmen look mad because they had "angry clone" faces? Is this StarFire an alternate dimension version of Hammy?? Also, is this my apartment?!?
I have a thousand questions myself.
Operator011
3 months ago
Great chapter, Snap! A little bit of action! I personally would've thought about it for a bit, considered my chances, and then I'd've gone with the "rescuers." xD Then again, that's probably why I got sorted into Ravenclaw and not Gryffindor. Reason being I would go with them is I have nowhere else to go, and I wouldn't know what I was running into or from. xD

aNyWAys, great chapter! I really enjoyed reading it. There were a couple parts where I had to re-read some of the dialogue to make sense of it, but they were few. Good job!
SnapStudio
3 months ago
Thanks a million, y'all!

Now that you mention it, I kind of wish I'd included some of you guys in this thing.

But you never know, some of you just might appear . . .
Operator011
3 months ago
Wait, what did I just say? "Reason being I would go with them is . . . " WHAT THE (to quote GRRR-eenie boi) TOENAIL?! XD
It should've been "Reason I would go with them being . . . " xD
KnightofElabor
3 months ago
Nice! These just keep getting better! (sorry i'm late)
SnapStudio
3 months ago
Thanks, dude!


And chapter 5 is now up, everyone!
Operator011
3 months ago
Snap: WOW, good plot twist. Interesting . . . .

Also, I think you should maybe just delete the model, and post a new chapter. The comment section is getting a bit clogged up . . . .
LWProductions
3 months ago
Oh my


I was starting to like StarFire... but I have my own theories

Very well written! Nice job bro!
MrBrick
3 months ago
Epic plot twist.
SnapStudio
3 months ago
@Everyone
Thanks for reading, and for 6K views!


@Operator
Well, ummm. This thing probably isn’t going to be one of those 18 chapter Mecabricks Novels. I'm hoping to wrap it up by Chapter 9, maybe start something new. BTW, what happened to "The LightBringers."
LWProductions
3 months ago
Nice job dude! Holy cow, this is getting good!
SnapStudio
3 months ago
Thanks, dude!

Did I miss a week?
Operator011
3 months ago
Snap: (about the Lightbringers) One word: PROCRASTINATION

Great chapter! It's good to meet some more users. I'm surprised that we haven't see more random people, TBH. Any explanation?
SnapStudio
3 months ago
Thank you, sir!

So you want the truth?

Well, I'm honestly trying to stick to the main subject of this story so that it doesn’t continue for too long. I'd like to get this thing finished so that I can focus on some other things, like creating some more new models.

Want to know a secret? Chapter 7 is not even written yet!


Also, it appears that only 3 people have read every chapter. Thanks so much for hanging with me guys!

But I definitely do want to give some of you guys a cameo before this thing ends.
KnightofElabor
3 months ago
Dang, I think I missed a chapter. Sorry bro.
This chapter was really great tho! I like where the story is going!
(and hopefully I'll be on time for the next one
)
SnapStudio
3 months ago
That’s okay, thanks so much!

If I do any more stories, I should probably make them individual posts so that people don’t accidentally miss chapters.
LWProductions
3 months ago
It's definitely my favorite as well! You certainly need more feedback on this... hold on real quick
KnightofElabor
3 months ago
You said to be honest so here it is:
These plot twist ARE driving me crazy


But seriously, this is really great. All the emotion feels realistic and the plot twist are well executed. Keep up the good work!
Greenflame24
3 months ago
This is great Snaptoit! SnappingShrip! SnappingTurtle! Snap! Snappy! SugarSnapPea! SnapCracklePop! Ok, enough nicknames. Anyways, one thing I'd suggest it trying to word things differently... agh... let me find a spot for example... ok... maybe I'm wrong
. I sometimes have my computer read stuff to me, and it can make things sound almost redundant with it's monotone accent. I honestly didn't really find anything wrong with the story so... great job! Keep it up!
SnapStudio
3 months ago
Thanks a million, guys!

SugarSnapPea

SnapCracklePop

LOL

Those are keepers!


What computer do you have Greenie?
Greenflame24
3 months ago
O_O The author of a story about hacking is randomly asking me what kind of computer I have...

*coughing from back of the room*

Random dude: Um, dude--

Me: Hey, it's bro, or man, or mate, or Greenie, or something other than dude... ok?

Random dude: Yeah, whatever. Anyways, he's not randomly asking. You mentioned your computer.

Me: Ooooooh... ok, well, uh... that kinda makes sense...


Ok, so Snapdragon, I have a 2014 13-inch MacBook Air.
SnapStudio
3 months ago


Cool.

How do you get it to read to you?
Dragon_Rider06
3 months ago
Great chapter! Can't wait for chapter 8!

(#WhatIsOfficialWaffleMonth?)
SnapStudio
3 months ago
Thanks so much.

It’s just a joke LegoWilderness started!
LWProductions
2 months ago
My goodness, this was fantastic


Who are these amazing guys?? They sure landed in prison in the nick of time, if that's a good thing. Hehe.

Thank you so much for the appearance, my mouth dropped open when I read that fifth paragraph

Spectacular job!!!
SnapStudio
2 months ago
@ManOfManyGuitars
Why thank you! Sorry that I forgot to add your username into the story (I’ll do that right after I'm done writing this comment).

@LegoWillie
Uhh, did I spell your name right? I'm just using Dustin for mine because . . .

1. It’s a cool name.


2. My actual name has not been revealed yet.
Dragon_Rider06
2 months ago
Awesome chapter Snappy!
*Tries to think of something witty to say about my cameo* *fails*
Nevermind, I'm just happy I got a cameo.
MrBrick
2 months ago
I think I missed a chapter... O_o can someone fill me in? This chapters great btw
Operator011
2 months ago
Great chapter! I love my appearance. That's exactly what I would do, if I wasn't being serious. xD
KnightofElabor
2 months ago
*Reading Thru the chapter* Wow this is pretty grea- *Sees my username* WAIT, I'M IN HERE!!!
I feel deeply honored!

(Also, “uhh, we don’t really have much of a choice!” is totally something I would say
)
Greenflame24
2 months ago
What the freakin gut! I'm in the story
Was not expecting that.

*coughing from back of the room*

Random dude: Nobody ever puts me in a story...

Me: Yeah, and I'm really grateful.

Random dude: You are just biased.

Me: How so?

Random dude: I don't know... you just our...

Me:
You misspelled 'are'.

Random dude: *runs off crying like a 46.5 pounds over weight baby*.

Me: Anyways, great job Snap
. Looking forward for more.
SnapStudio
2 months ago
@MrBrick
I’ll be nice and PM you chapter 7, it was the best so far. And thank ye.

@Zee-O-Pea


@LegoWillie
Okay, sweet!

@KnightofElabor
Glad you enjoyed it.


@Greenie
Umm. Thank you!
You can never have too much Random Dude.

@Everyone
Kind of wish that you could reply to comments . . .
LWProductions
2 months ago
Wonderful job! This has a bit of Emoji Movie feel to it


Love these new twists! Hmm, lemme see if I can fly... nope.
Dragon_Rider06
2 months ago
Nice job! This story is getting really great! I cannot wait until chapter 10!
SnapStudio
2 months ago
Thanks a million, you two!
KnightofElabor
2 months ago
Nice! This is a great chapter bro!

*Inner filmmaker thinking about how cool this chapter would look in a movie*
SnapStudio
2 months ago
Many thanks, buddy!

I'm into film too.
Greenflame24
2 months ago
I have peace like a river, I have peace like a river... ok... sorry... my sister was singing... whatever... this is going great!
SnapStudio
2 months ago
Sorry about the wait for chapter 10.
MrBrick
2 weeks ago
“Good riddance!”, I shouted as I jumped up and threw it out the window.

Definitely the best part
SnapStudio
2 weeks ago
Thank yea!
Now, I get to write out a speech . . . XD
Greenflame24
2 weeks ago
Wow... I can't believe it... I was a hero... and then... I DIED!!!!!! YEAH!!!!! THERE IS FINALLY SOMEONE ELSE ON HERE WHO LIKES KILLING OFF CHARACTERS!!!!!!!!

*coughing from back of the room*

Random dude: Um Greenie?

Me: *rolls eyes* What...?

Random dude: You know he probably intended for you to just end up in your room like BlackPixel... right?

InnerWritingWorm: Well, seeing as he didn't actually write that, let's assume it's true.

InnerBookWorm: Actually, being the one who likes to read, I imagine that he ended up somewhere else and will be the key focus of the next story.

IWW(InnerWritingWorm): That's unrealistic!

IBW(InnerBookWorm): BETTER THAN SOMETHING YOU COULD RIGHT!!!

IWW: YOU MISPELLED 'WRITE'!!!

IBW: WELL YOU MISPELLIELED 'MISPELLIELED'!!!!

IWW: I HATE YOU!!!!

InnerChristmasElf: Boys?

IBW: I HATE YOU EVEN MORE!!!!

IWW: NO YOU DON'T!!!

ICE(InnerChristmasElf): BOYS?!?!

IBW: YEEEEEEESSSSS!!!! I!!!!! DOOOOOOOO!!!!!

ICE: BOYS!!!!!!

O_O...

ICE: You are now both on a check twice list.

IWW: Your fault...

IBW: Prove it...

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ICE: I am sorry, but I highly doubt any of y'all will receive gifts this Christmas.

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ICE: *sighs*
SnapStudio
2 weeks ago
Good thing we've never seen anything that bad on MB.
KnightofElabor
2 weeks ago
Bro, this story was flippin awesome!!!

I loved how you tied it into MB with that last bit. Really nice touch

Can't wait to see what you write next!
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